Sailing Trip 
Last friday we want sailing when we arrived we
swore the glistering water of LakeRuo then I swore two
people playing basketball in canoes and then we
had parted and we got into groups I was in group
two. everybody in group two got into groups of three
was in boat 24 than we got told what to do then
we had morning tea after that we pushed one of
the boat in and the one person got in and it looked
so fun when it was my turn it went slow and I crashed
into a big stick then I got back and talked then it was
lunch and we had all of the bouts in I was the first
in my group and I was going faster than the automatic
bouts because of the wind then I made it back and I
just talked and at the end we went home in a
double decker bus
swore the glistering water of LakeRuo then I swore two
people playing basketball in canoes and then we
had parted and we got into groups I was in group
two. everybody in group two got into groups of three
was in boat 24 than we got told what to do then
we had morning tea after that we pushed one of
the boat in and the one person got in and it looked
so fun when it was my turn it went slow and I crashed
into a big stick then I got back and talked then it was
lunch and we had all of the bouts in I was the first
in my group and I was going faster than the automatic
bouts because of the wind then I made it back and I
just talked and at the end we went home in a
double decker bus
Hi Jayden I love how you added in key details about what you did and enjoyed. I also like how you said that you went home / back to school in a double Decker Bus. Maybe time reread your writing for spelling mistakes, missing words and full stops and capital letters.In the end i think it is a great blog post even though there was a few mistakes.
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